My dress for the Air Force Ball came in today. I have to have a few things done but it seems to be fitting. It’s a little big like I said I have to have a few things done but nothing major I hope alterations won’t take long.
I worked on Little Boy Blue today too I’m trying to figure out the opening paragraph. I didn’t like the one I had and this is more of an YA than Adult so I think the change is needed. Though this is also a short story so who knows.
Why is it that a handful of authors out there have somewhat slow chapters and that’s okay but when I’m trying to write a chapter that needs a slow beginning its “writing needs work.” Do people really think telling a writer “writing needs work” and not explaining what “work” their talking about is helpful? Is it grammar, spelling, not your writing style, I mean seriously tell me what your talking about. I say this because I just checked on the submission of Legacy‘s first page over at WeBook.com and a rater only put down “writing needs work.” Mind you its not even the whole first page and no it doesn’t jump out in grab you. I’m not putting action in the first chapter when the main character is headed to a funeral. This is what I don’t get when I’m sending out Legacy to all these agents asking for the first say five pages aren’t getting into the story because your getting to know the main character. You’re seeing that she’s having issues and that people that normally wouldn’t be hanging around her are. It’s little things that are in the first chapter that will make you start to think somethings going on but the first page all you know is that her rich uncle died and a friend is taking her to his plane.
So today I had another rejection letter in my email. I’m okay with it Wednesdays was the one I was hoping not to get. I started working on Little Boy Blue. FlyBoy suggested I take a break from Legacy since I’ve been working on it for so long. He was right I’m to close to it and I really need readers to look it over to find the issues it has. I actually had four really good readers but life has taken them back form me so I’m without at the moment. I loved having their opinions though because they truly helped make the story better. Flyboy doesn’t think he can me critical enough because he’s my biggest fan and I can do know wrong, in my writing, so he feels to close. It’s a great that he feels that strong about my work but it doesn’t help when I’m trying to edit it and he can’t step away from it being my writing. But that’s why I love him.
I think I’m going to put my fears away and try and contact my favorite authors to see if one of them might feel up to becoming my mentor, cross your fingers.
Also I’ve put up Blood on WeBook.com to get some feed back. It’s a website or authors and readers, agents and publishers check it out for new authors, so I’m on it and hopefully someone will like what they see.
Check out the latest post on PBD, my journey with my friends continues.
Yesterday was all about edits.